Most bank emails read like a committee meeting. A little bit of everything, a whole lot of nothing.
Rates here, a new branch there, and don’t forget the podcast, app, the upcoming shred day, and the CEO’s golf photo.
It’s not that those things don’t matter, it’s that they can’t all matter at once.
Every email needs a job. One job.
To get a click. To spark a call. To move someone closer to your team.
When you cram five messages into one email, you give the reader the option to ignore you completely.
They don’t have time to sort your priorities. That’s your job.
So go back to the last email you sent. Open it.
Read it like someone who’s just waiting for their kid in the school pickup line.
What was the one thing this email wanted me to do?
Did it lead with that?
Did it make it easy?
Did it sound like a real human wrote it?
Start with a subject line that tees up the job.
Keep the copy tight. Short enough to read before the light turns green.
End with one clear next step.
You’re not writing an email. You’re building a bridge.
Don’t make it a maze.